(Story) Nichole Van Croft Vs. Olivia Munn

[kennaon]

As the other poster said- fantastic story-
but if you want comments - don't ask for the thread to be deleted,
instead suggest that you might continue with more stories later,
as the impression you gave was not only were you so unhappy with
what you wrote that you wanted it gone for no one to read-
that it kind of implied you wouldn't be writing any more...

I'm all for encouraging writers- on a board like this, struggling the way it is
its important to provide feedback for those willing to showcase
but it's hard to summon up feedback for someone who quit 8hrs in.

That said- you've got a unique style - if you keep writing, I'm sure
you'll continue to gain fans. Don't take this negatively, but its hard
for anyone to believe in your writing -if you're telling us at the same
time that you don't.

I happen to know who Nichole and Olivia are- I don't think I've ever seen
them used together in the same setting, much less Katy Perry and Felicia Day-
extra points for creativity there.

Extra points for finishing the story and posting it- instead of
posting part of it and leaving us hanging.

If you're looking for ideas- a few days ago you mentioned envisioning Mila kicking Elisha's ass-

I'm sure there's more than one poster who would be happy to comment if you did that story.

Just my thoughts.

[Twiddler]

As the other poster said- fantastic story-
but if you want comments - don't ask for the thread to be deleted,
instead suggest that you might continue with more stories later,
as the impression you gave was not only were you so unhappy with
what you wrote that you wanted it gone for no one to read-
that it kind of implied you wouldn't be writing any more...

I'm all for encouraging writers- on a board like this, struggling the way it is
its important to provide feedback for those willing to showcase
but it's hard to summon up feedback for someone who quit 8hrs in.

That said- you've got a unique style - if you keep writing, I'm sure
you'll continue to gain fans. Don't take this negatively, but its hard
for anyone to believe in your writing -if you're telling us at the same
time that you don't.

I happen to know who Nichole and Olivia are- I don't think I've ever seen
them used together in the same setting, much less Katy Perry and Felicia Day-
extra points for creativity there.

Extra points for finishing the story and posting it- instead of
posting part of it and leaving us hanging.

If you're looking for ideas- a few days ago you mentioned envisioning Mila kicking Elisha's ass-

I'm sure there's more than one poster who would be happy to comment if you did that story.

Just my thoughts.

Oh, you'll be seeing more from me, don't worry. Got a whole list of matches I'm working on.

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First Set Of Practice Matches (Tom's)

1. Nichole Van Croft Vs. Olivia Munn – Winner Must Make Opponent Orgasm before she can pin or submit her. (DONE!)
2. Yvonne Strahovski Vs. Amanda Righetti – No DQ, Falls Count Anywhere match (In Progress)
3. Katy Perry Vs. Keeley Hazell – I Quit. (DONE!)
4. Emma Caulfield Vs. Felicia Day in a Leather Strap match.
5. Sarah Michelle Gellar Vs. Jennifer Love Hewitt – Best 2 out of 3 Falls.
6. Allison Scagliotti Vs. Lea Michelle – Steel Cage
7. Kat Dennings Vs. Kristen Bell – Tables Match
8. Jenny Wade Vs. Emma Stone – Last Woman Standing
9. Kristen Kruek Vs. Jennifer Garner – Singles Match
10. Bianca Beauchamp Vs. Eliza Dushku – Breast Smother Vs. Face Sit
11. Elena Satine Vs. Hayden Panetierre – Striptease match.

Second Set of Practice Matches (Josh's)

'Loser Disgraced' Match
Katy Perry vs Olivia Munn
[Loser will be handcuffed and the Winner can do whatever they like to them!]

'Bitches on a Leash' Match
Emma Stone vs Emma Caulfield
[Basically this is a Bullrope Match]

'No Clothes Allowed' Match
Kat Dennings vs Jennifer Garner
[Real Simple! No Clothes Allowed!!!]

'First Blood' Match
Keeley Hazell vs Nichole Von Croft
[First to make their opponent Bleed wins!]

'Vibrator on a Pole' Match
Amanda Righetti vs Eliza Dushku
[Vibrator is on a Pole, Winner must make their opponent orgasm with the Vibrator]

'Fan Interaction' Match
Allison Scagliotti vs Hayden Panetierre
[Winner will pick a member of the crowd, the loser then becomes the slave of this lucky fan! The idea being one pretty lady will be stuck with possibly a fat nerd from the front row?]

'Tables' Match
Bianca Beauchamp vs Kristen Bell
[Just a regular Tables Match]

'Hellbound' Match
Jenny Wade vs Felicia Day
[A Scaffolding Match, where the loser is the person pushed from the Scaffolding and through the Tables Below!]

'Parking Lot Cat Fight'
Sarah Michelle Gellar vs Kristen Kruek
[Just a Parking Lot Brawl, Submissions & Pinfall to Win!]

'No Disqualification' MatchYvonne Strahovski vs Lea Michele
[Anything Goes!!! Win by Pinfall or Submission]

'Submission' MatchElena Satine vs Jennifer Love Hewitt

Third Set Of Practice Matches

1. Olivia Munn vs Hayden Panetierre - Orgasmalore
Rules: Best of Two Matches. Opponents fight a random match where they must force a girl into submission and cause them to orgasm. Then they will face each other and force the opponent to orgasm. There is a penalty for losing the random match (Pleasuring the random opponent afterwards). If the match is a draw, a third round is carried out outside the ring and into the audience.

2. Kristen Kruek vs Katy Perry - Ring Jester
Rules: Strip your opponent and Ring them out! The loser must then walk back to the dressing room naked as they're oggled by the fans (or booed)

3. Felicia Day vs Elena Satine - Think Outside the Ring
Rules: First to Pin their opponent outside the ring wins.

4. Sarah Michelle Gellar vs Emma Stone - Fanservice!
Rules: Defeat your opponent in a best of three falls by showing off the most of your opponents body to the fans.

5. Bianca Beauchamp vs Lea Michelle - Pleasurable Lights Out
Rules: Knock out your opponent by tiring them out from orgasms.

6. Sex Kittens vs Hellbound - Party for Four
Rules: The opposing team must be pinned and held into submission at the same time in order to declare a winning team. This means that one person (in the ring or out) is pinned while the other is held into submission (in the ring or out).

7. Kristen Bell vs Allison Scagliotti - Spartan Victory
Rules: Only a KO is acceptable victory.

8. Geek Squad vs I-Spy - Nerds Day Out
Rules: Only the most technical and stylish Pin or Submission wins the match as voted by Fans.

9. Kat Dennings vs Jenny Wade - Losers First
Rules: First to pin wins.

10. Yvonne Strahovski vs Amanda Righetti - Stamina Match
Rules: Loser is the one unable to continue wrestling.

11. Keeley Hazell vs Jennifer Love Hewitt - I-Quit Match.
Rules: Force your opponent to resign.

12. Emma Caulfield Vs. Nichole Van Croft - First to Five.
Rules: First to make her opponent orgasm five times wins.

13. Jennifer Garner Vs. Eliza Dushku - Orgasmalore
Rules: Best of Two Matches. Opponents fight a random match where they must force a girl into submission and cause them to orgasm. Then they will face each other and force the opponent to orgasm. There is a penalty for losing the random match (Pleasuring the random opponent afterwards). If the match is a draw, a third round is carried out outside the ring and into the audience.

[kennaon]

If you don't mind me asking - who are the members of the following tag teams:

I-spy, Hellbound,
Sex Kittens, Geek Squad

[Twiddler]

If you don't mind me asking - who are the members of the following tag teams:

I-spy, Hellbound,
Sex Kittens, Geek Squad

Let me answer that with the current roster of ladies I'm using and have finished bios for.

EFW Roster

Tag Teams

Geek Squad (Felicia Day/Olivia Munn) (F)
Hellbound (Jenny Wade/Emma Caufield) (H)
I-Spy (Jennifer Garner/Yvonne Strahovski) (F)
Sex Kittens (Nichole Van Croft/Katy Perry) (H)
Spirit Squad (Diana Agron/Naya Rivera) (T)


Roster

Kristen Kruek (H)
Allison Scagliotti (F)
Bianca Beauchamp (F)
Lea Michelle (H)
Emma Stone (F)
Kat Dennings (T)
Amanda Righetti (H)
Eliza Dushku (H)
Kristen Bell (T)
Keeley Hazell (F)
Jennifer Love Hewitt (H)
Sarah Michelle Gellar (F)
Elena Satine (H)
Hayden Panetierre (F)
Heather Morris (F)
Kaley Cuoco (H)

[kennaon]

Lol! Where do I get tickets?!

Extra points for using my favorite Glee Girls,
(got other favorites on your list but I'm attempting to be brief)

What does EFW stand for?

[Twiddler]

Extreme Female Wrestling. I was gonna do a fed, but have since decided to just keep doing random matches and setlists, and still continue making my roster larger and larger.

[TommyBB]

Great story! I'm definitely looking forward to more by you.

But why are you telling us the winners of all the fights you've got planned before they're written? That's not exactly suspenseful.

And obviously, you can't have Amanda Righetti losing to Yvonne Strahovski twice....that's unacceptable!

[SamJ]

Not been around for a while, so I've only just picked up on this, but this was a GREAT story!!!

Casting Nichole as a Heel struck me as a bit strange, as she doesn't look the part and I've never seen or read anything to suggest that she might be that way inclined, but that just means there's no reason to disbelieve it either.

Love the idea of some of your forthcoming match types (particularly Orgasmalore and Lights Out), but I have to agree with TommyBB that I DO NOT want to know the winner in advance. It's not just a matter of suspense; there is a certain satisfaction in discovering that you have correctly predicted the winner, and also a different kind of satisfaction in finding out that the other girl surprised your favourite, but there is no satisfaction at all in finding out that the girl you were told would win has won.

How many people do you know who actually LIKE to hear the result of a championship boxing match on the news??? Many will still watch/read the match and many will still enjoy it, but not as much as if they had not been forewarned of the result.

Please don't tell us the results of future matches, and you might want to consider editing the results out of your existing posts for the benefit of those who have not had the misfortune to read those details yet.

[Twiddler]

Not been around for a while, so I've only just picked up on this, but this was a GREAT story!!!

Casting Nichole as a Heel struck me as a bit strange, as she doesn't look the part and I've never seen or read anything to suggest that she might be that way inclined, but that just means there's no reason to disbelieve it either.

Love the idea of some of your forthcoming match types (particularly Orgasmalore and Lights Out), but I have to agree with TommyBB that I DO NOT want to know the winner in advance. It's not just a matter of suspense; there is a certain satisfaction in discovering that you have correctly predicted the winner, and also a different kind of satisfaction in finding out that the other girl surprised your favourite, but there is no satisfaction at all in finding out that the girl you were told would win has won.

How many people do you know who actually LIKE to hear the result of a championship boxing match on the news??? Many will still watch/read the match and many will still enjoy it, but not as much as if they had not been forewarned of the result.

Please don't tell us the results of future matches, and you might want to consider editing the results out of your existing posts for the benefit of those who have not had the misfortune to read those details yet.

Oh, don't worry. They've been edited out in the EFW thread.